VN Ren'Py Heartsworn Abyss [v0.2p] [sky blue aster]

[swiver]

I understand, however, that there are people who order steak in seafood restaurants. My parents do it all the time.

Brilliant! This be a note on every game thread, in italics, followed by your handle and the date..

There's not much sex yet I take? You also do not list future tags either, but from the rest of the thread I take it explicit scenes will be included?

 

[DreamDestiny]

Game still very early so alot of thing can happen ... btw dont make too many choice because it get too confusing if choice keep branching off to different route then dont know which ending is branching which ending.. i had play a game where almost every choice branch off to different route and ending and dont know which is which and something end up in a loop lol. best is to keep route small and less branching.. unless choice doesnt effect route much but system point or something

 

[fantasy189]

thank you!

 

[zashe7861]

Generally speaking, Rei is not pathetic enough to knowingly lend the heroine out. If Akari is doing something… disloyal, it's probably because you made a bad choice, or she was coerced into it by ugly bastards. You can avoid many awful situations by being smart in her route. That being said, it’s difficult to avoid every bad scenario. Even the most innocuous choices can have rather adverse outcomes, ehehe.

Now, I grew up with CYOA books, so I love tackling difficult situations using various methods. The story does progress through a certain path (e.g. train, house, school), but the way you arrive there can be quite different depending on your choices.

As for "netorase content," I wouldn’t classify this game as such. It’s mainly netorare. You might see some situations like the scenario below:

Let's say the heroine works as the secretary to the student council president. MC is uncomfortable with it, but you can't say for certain FMC and handsome bastard are doing illicit things behind your back. However, since the game takes place from Akari and Rei's POV, you can actually see happens versus what Rei perceives to be happening. This POV switching was really fun to write for me, and you’ll experience more of it in Chapters 4 and 5. Not only that, you’ll also witness Akari’s insecurities when Rei talks to other girls!

ok so just cheating gay cuck and sad boy vibes and the MC is pathetic. I see. so no swinging or having awesome 3 way sex. i wonder why so many people who enjoy NTR like to be depressed? and sad?

 

[Enlight432]

ok so just cheating gay cuck and sad boy vibes and the MC is pathetic. I see. so no swinging or having awesome 3 way sex. i wonder why so many people who enjoy NTR like to be depressed? and sad?

I'm a fan of NTR and NTS, not all Netorare games revolve around depression and despair, if mc is not a loser and stupid and pathetic (and can defend fmc) and fmc is not stupid and a dick charm (after seeing huge dick or after two or three times having sex with a huge dick do not lose all your character and personality) and the story should be logical (the reason for sleeping with other males should not be stupid and simple and small), feelings of depression and despair are not produced

 

[Enlight432]

The dev mentioned that if we make the right choices, fmc and fmc's heart will always be behind us and mc will not be a loser, so hard NTR can be avoided
skyblueaster

 

[Enlight432]

ok so just cheating gay cuck and sad boy vibes and the MC is pathetic. I see. so no swinging or having awesome 3 way sex. i wonder why so many people who enjoy NTR like to be depressed? and sad?

Usually two categories, masochists and those who do not self-insert and enjoy seeing others suffer (sadism) love the feeling of depression and despair in MC

 

[WutWutWutWut]

Usually two categories, masochists and those who do not self-insert and enjoy seeing others suffer (sadism) love the feeling of depression and despair in MC

Then why make the male character the main character. I feel like a lot more people would be more fine with ntr if the main character was the woman.

 

[skyblueaster]

Then why make the male character the main character. I feel like a lot more people would be more fine with ntr if the main character was the woman.

You play as MC and FMC in Heartsworn Abyss. So you get the best of both worlds.

 

[Enlight432]

Then why make the male character the main character

For the masochist category (self-insert): because the majority of adult game players are male
For the category of sadism (not self-insert) : because mc is the one who suffers a lot in the story, fmc mostly suffers only at the beginning of the story,then she falls in love with bull's dick (bull's performance's) and enjoys her new life

 

[Enlight432]

You play as MC and FMC in Heartsworn Abyss. So you get the best of both worlds.

My brother, do you confirm of this?
https://f95zone.to/threads/heartsworn-abyss-v0-1p-sky-blue-aster.223034/post-14724649

 

[M3lly]

Then why make the male character the main character. I feel like a lot more people would be more fine with ntr if the main character was the woman.

There are more at stake if there is a main character and they are in a relationship. It is not as impactful if it is just a female mc, the game basically becomes a slut simulator.

 

[skyblueaster]

Wow, you guys are really seeking to avoid NTR in an NTR game, haha. I guess it’s human nature to want that glimmer of hope in even the most despair-inducing darkness.

With very smart decision making (and perhaps a bit of “help” using the secret walkthrough on Patreon), I suppose it’s possible to avoid “hard NTR” content. By that, I’m assuming people mean penetrative sex and the heroine becoming a c×cksleeve for the evil bastard.

Now, this “pure route” is very obscure and requires some unintuitive decision making. It’s not the intended playing order, and you’ll also miss a good chunk of the H scenes, being that this is an NTR game. I always planned for this to be a secret route, but to avoid this thread being dominated by "Is the NTR avoidable?" discussion, I might as well let the cat out of the bag. Lmao.

Writing multiple routes actually isn’t an issue for me, that was always in the works. Like, Chapter 1 is 25k words and already longer than many visual novels, ahaha. What can I say? I love reading and writing; pressing left-click is my favorite form of gameplay.

Anyway, the main thing keeping me up at night is funding. What you see here is basically years of saving for me, since I have barely anything left after rent, bills, and family are paid for. I need to reserve my slots well in advance, so I apologize if my Patreon shilling gets a little annoying.

Honestly, one of my biggest regrets is not having those two H-scenes (restroom, stairway) already included in Chapter 1. If I knew my game was gonna get leaked, I'd want to start off on a good impression, hahaha. I just had no money, so I will expand those scenes once I save enough.

Anyhow, I’ve just released Chapter 2.
It’s a succinct, action-packed chapter that leads to Chapter 3, which will contain the first real H-scene. Chapter 3 itself is hella long (about 15k words) because it contains an alternate route depending on Akari’s choices in Chapters 1&2. I’m furiously working on it as we speak.

I am uh… contractually obligated to tell you to subscribe to the Patreon to play Chapter 2.
And give you a strong look of disapproval if you get it on the front page of this thread.

(But do let your friends and family know about Heartsworn Abyss if you enjoyed it, regardless of the way you obtained it.)

 

[RossoX]

I am uh… contractually obligated to tell you to subscribe to the Patreon to play Chapter 2.

Damn son, this VN was very well written, with good grammar and narrative build up. It was kinda shocking honestly, I was not expecting this level quality, given the usual standard of writing that we get on 90% of porn games around here. The subject matter of rape also hits much harder here, because the writing delivers proper tension and gravitas to the situation.

I wish you good luck dev, but I'll tell you this: despite the overall quality and polish of your VN, based on what I've seen from years of following porn games, is that these kinds of projects live and die by the smut content. It pains to say this, but if you expect to garner support around these parts relying on writing alone, sadly it won't work. People aren't here just to buy novels after all (however good they are).

Seeing as you're aiming for NTR, well it might just be my subjective view on this which may be incorrect, but there could be a clash between the hard theme of rape (which based on the current story, happens from the very start), and the what the target audience would expect from an NTR story. Things like the slow build up of corruption and escalation of sex scenes. What I'm trying to say is that this thematic conflict might hamper the growth of your support base.

I was genuinely impressed by your demo and I'd like to see where this story goes. I'm saying this because I actually want you to succeed.

 

[DreamDestiny]

will this game have h-stats for her? other than knowing she is a virgin or not. I will wait for more content at this time there no H-scene

 

[MSG64]

Wow, you guys are really seeking to avoid NTR in an NTR game, haha. I guess it’s human nature to want that glimmer of hope in even the most despair-inducing darkness.

With very smart decision making (and perhaps a bit of “help” using the secret walkthrough on Patreon), I suppose it’s possible to avoid “hard NTR” content. By that, I’m assuming people mean penetrative sex and the heroine becoming a c×cksleeve for the evil bastard.

Now, this “pure route” is very obscure and requires some unintuitive decision making. It’s not the intended playing order, and you’ll also miss a good chunk of the H scenes, being that this is an NTR game. I always planned for this to be a secret route, but to avoid this thread being dominated by "Is the NTR avoidable?" discussion, I might as well let the cat out of the bag. Lmao.

Writing multiple routes actually isn’t an issue for me, that was always in the works. Like, Chapter 1 is 25k words and already longer than many visual novels, ahaha. What can I say? I love reading and writing; pressing left-click is my favorite form of gameplay.

Anyway, the main thing keeping me up at night is funding. What you see here is basically years of saving for me, since I have barely anything left after rent, bills, and family are paid for. I need to reserve my slots well in advance, so I apologize if my Patreon shilling gets a little annoying.

Honestly, one of my biggest regrets is not having those two H-scenes (restroom, stairway) already included in Chapter 1. If I knew my game was gonna get leaked, I'd want to start off on a good impression, hahaha. I just had no money, so I will expand those scenes once I save enough.

Anyhow, I’ve just released Chapter 2.
It’s a succinct, action-packed chapter that leads to Chapter 3, which will contain the first real H-scene. Chapter 3 itself is hella long (about 15k words) because it contains an alternate route depending on Akari’s choices in Chapters 1&2. I’m furiously working on it as we speak.

I am uh… contractually obligated to tell you to subscribe to the Patreon to play Chapter 2.
And give you a strong look of disapproval if you get it on the front page of this thread.

(But do let your friends and family know about Heartsworn Abyss if you enjoyed it, regardless of the way you obtained it.)

Tbh I'm also one of those that like having a "good" ending where you can skip most if not all of the ntr, but that's not because I wanna read ONLY that version of the story but because knowing that I can avoid ntr, trying my hardest to and still failing/getting ntr'd is what gives me the most enjoyement out of ntr stories
When it's forced and unavoidable I'm just like "whatever", it's still fine but it's not as exciting as "oh shit I fucked up it's happening now"
Though it's a difficult balance to strike as the game needs to be "hard" enough to possibly make the player fail without feeling like you're railroaded on the bad route on your first playthrough either, you really have to feel like it's YOUR fault as the player and not the game's (also some games are so obvious in what the choices will lead to that you actually need to consciously take very bad choices to see the ntr scenes, those are way worse than unavoidable ntr in my opinion, it really takes you out of the story)

 

[skyblueaster]

Hello, fine Instructors of the Janitorial Arts.

I added a free demo (Prologue) on my Patreon page. Please use that to guide your decision on whether to support me! You can apply the R18 patch to it and unlock more scenes.

… Assuming you haven’t pirated the hell out of the game already, haha.

 

[skyblueaster]

Tbh I'm also one of those that like having a "good" ending where you can skip most if not all of the ntr, but that's not because I wanna read ONLY that version of the story but because knowing that I can avoid ntr, trying my hardest to and still failing/getting ntr'd is what gives me the most enjoyement out of ntr stories
When it's forced and unavoidable I'm just like "whatever", it's still fine but it's not as exciting as "oh shit I fucked up it's happening now"
Though it's a difficult balance to strike as the game needs to be "hard" enough to possibly make the player fail without feeling like you're railroaded on the bad route on your first playthrough either, you really have to feel like it's YOUR fault as the player and not the game's (also some games are so obvious in what the choices will lead to that you actually need to consciously take very bad choices to see the ntr scenes, those are way worse than unavoidable ntr in my opinion, it really takes you out of the story)

I don’t do unrealistic choices. You’ll see my characters choke under pressure and do dumb things, but the bad guys mess up a lot too. Situations in my VN are very much about recognizing the protagonist’s own weaknesses while exploiting those left open by others.

Too often, games either make the fat bastard invincible or give the MC infinite plot armor, which gets a bit annoying when there’s no stakes, haha.

 

[earthfire]

Wow, you guys are really seeking to avoid NTR in an NTR game, haha. I guess it’s human nature to want that glimmer of hope in even the most despair-inducing darkness.

With very smart decision making (and perhaps a bit of “help” using the secret walkthrough on Patreon), I suppose it’s possible to avoid “hard NTR” content. By that, I’m assuming people mean penetrative sex and the heroine becoming a c×cksleeve for the evil bastard.

Now, this “pure route” is very obscure and requires some unintuitive decision making. It’s not the intended playing order, and you’ll also miss a good chunk of the H scenes, being that this is an NTR game. I always planned for this to be a secret route, but to avoid this thread being dominated by "Is the NTR avoidable?" discussion, I might as well let the cat out of the bag. Lmao.

Writing multiple routes actually isn’t an issue for me, that was always in the works. Like, Chapter 1 is 25k words and already longer than many visual novels, ahaha. What can I say? I love reading and writing; pressing left-click is my favorite form of gameplay.

Anyway, the main thing keeping me up at night is funding. What you see here is basically years of saving for me, since I have barely anything left after rent, bills, and family are paid for. I need to reserve my slots well in advance, so I apologize if my Patreon shilling gets a little annoying.

Honestly, one of my biggest regrets is not having those two H-scenes (restroom, stairway) already included in Chapter 1. If I knew my game was gonna get leaked, I'd want to start off on a good impression, hahaha. I just had no money, so I will expand those scenes once I save enough.

Anyhow, I’ve just released Chapter 2.
It’s a succinct, action-packed chapter that leads to Chapter 3, which will contain the first real H-scene. Chapter 3 itself is hella long (about 15k words) because it contains an alternate route depending on Akari’s choices in Chapters 1&2. I’m furiously working on it as we speak.

I am uh… contractually obligated to tell you to subscribe to the Patreon to play Chapter 2.
And give you a strong look of disapproval if you get it on the front page of this thread.

(But do let your friends and family know about Heartsworn Abyss if you enjoyed it, regardless of the way you obtained it.)

Maybe this is stupid to ask if this is supposed to be a NTR focus game but even outside of the pure route will there be wholesome scenes between the main characters and possible good endings?

 

[skyblueaster]

I uploaded v0.2 to Patreon and less than a day later it’s already up here.
Homies, if only my dad was as fast coming back from buying milk…